Wednesday, August 8, 2018
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Hi Corbyn
ReplyDeleteI think you have done stunning job on writing the procedure. Maybe next time you could not make it yellow so it is not to bright. I remember a time when I wrote a procedure about how to make a cake.
By Hayley HB
Also could you go back over it and edit it
DeleteI think that this is amazing work! maybe you can go back over and edit your work a pit more.This makes me think of the time when I had hot chocolate. From Bronte!
ReplyDeleteThank you
DeleteHello Corbyn,
ReplyDeleteI really like your post about hot chocolate. I like how you said "good hot chocolate. I think you should edit it I little bit, this is because you Said for step 2 "grab some hot chocolate grab some milk grab some hot chocolate" see you said grab some hot chocolate twice! other then that I really liked it. well have a nice day.
-Jasper.
Thank you😀😀
ReplyDeleteHello Corbyn,
ReplyDeleteThank you for replying. I think you should work on your reply's. I think this because you just said "Thank You". Next time I think you should add more details or ask a Question. You could tell me what I need to work on when I am commenting. Well have a nice day.
-Jasper
Hi Corbyn I love your post maybe check that your spelling is correct and if its not fix it other than that I love this blog post.
ReplyDeleteHey thanks check on your spelling.
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ReplyDeleteHi corbyn my name is george from Marshland School it’s a smart idea that you highlighted the text to make it show through the darker background. You reminded me of when my mum put a method of how to make hot chocolate the first days i was learning how to make hot chocolate. However it said hot chocolate in the title but there was no heating up part and you said grab to much.
Thank you next time I will check my writing before I post something on my blog.
DeleteGood evening Corbyn, a hot chocolate is my favourite drink. Maybe instead of writing 'grab' you could say, 'get a'. I notice that you wrote 'grab a cup and grab some hot chocolate'. I do like how you have the procedure in the right order. That's important. What did your hot chocolate taste like? Maybe next time you could make the staff one.
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